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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether or not having a
baby
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 has been a difficult decision for parents throughout in years. It is not only a difficult decision, but
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 a big responsibility for couples. Especially the mother’s role in
this
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 process is more important than the
father
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’s one generally.
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, there are some ideas that support the importance of fatherhood as much as motherhood.
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 of all, the special relationship between
baby
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 and mother have to be accepted. She bears her in her own body for 9 months and
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 she feeds him/her with her own milk by breastfeeding.
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, there is a magical relationship between mother and
baby
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 naturally.
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, it has to be respected decision of the woman for having or not having children because it is a big responsibility
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 acceptance of a new life in her own body.
On the other hand
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, it should not be ignored the
father
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’s role in
this
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 process. Couples have to take some responsibilities by considering together. If a husband would like to have a child, his partner
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 should think about that. In contrary, a wife cannot force her partner for making a child, even if she is going to bear the
baby
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 in her body.
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 harmony should be sustained in the process of growing children as well.
Although
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 the
father
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 cannot provide
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 essential requirements for their children, he should always help to mother.
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, while children are growing up, some main duties of the
father
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 commence in
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 period. In conclusion, it should be approved that fatherhood is not able to be important as much as motherhood in the most situations.
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, being a good
father
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 has to be objective of every prospective
father
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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