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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that taking care of children is a crucial function of the community especially parents. While some people recommend that parents should participate in pre – parenting courses, others convince that they do not have to for being great parents. On the one hand, parents will obtain
skills
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the skills
 and knowledge to tackle with children in different circumstances through pre –parenting training.
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, they will know how to deal with their children well when they are crying or having proper action once they make mistakes.
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, if they were trained on how to guide their children, they would easily know how to identify their
children
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child's
child
 characteristics and orient for their development since they are young.
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, it is very difficult to put all parents in the same courses as it would not be so practical since they have different backgrounds, knowledge.
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, in theory, parents are taught that they have to teach their children gently,
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, in practice, parents found that they have to have some punishments to stubborn children.
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, people prefer to learn by themselves through
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the internet
 or relatives to go to classic for
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 impractical methods. In conclusion, parents should attend the training before becoming parents if they are not ready for a new responsibility.
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, it is more important if they can find themselves the appropriate way to bring up their children.
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