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The people sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individual and society?

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In the majority of the countries, lifestyle has been changed radically since the
last
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 two
decades which
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decades, which
 result in limited sleep and rest on a daily basis. It is commonly thought by many scientist
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 to
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 that depletion in sleeping practices by human beings due to reasons
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 as longer working hours, spending a huge amount of
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 on social media and television sets etc. Fewer hours of sleep
is
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are
 mainly responsible for poor health, stress, anxiety and disputed relations with family and friends.
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 with, the human being revolutionized their
life
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 and habits in order to match with the modern era of the world. Poor sleeping practices
is
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are
 one of
them which
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them, which
 is the result of extended working hours at the office, spending a lot of
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 on social media
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Tweeter etc. All in all technological advancement really ruined human’s
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 in terms of sleeping habits.
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, according to a survey by BBC news, people nowadays sleep often 23% less as
compare
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compared
 to the 20th century. There are noticeable downsides which are affecting the people on
personal
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a personal
 as well as social level. Individually, due to limited sleep people often feel so much stress and anxiety issues during the daily routine, which causes disrupted relations with family members and friends.
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 people are inactive in contributing to society which is one of the main reasons for poor local social
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.
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, the Times journal report published on 15th January 2019 states, nowadays around 35% of the population is less efficient, stressed and inactive due to poor sleep and changed lifestyle affecting them immensely. To conclude, sleep plays a vital role in a happy and healthy
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. People do take less sleep due to a transformed lifestyle which affects them personally and as a society in tremendous ways.
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