Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development?

Globalization
means interaction and integration among people, companies, and governments worldwide.
From
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For
last
few decades,
such
inter country relationships has increased a lot, some people believe that it is not advantageous to us.
However
, I believe that, to a great extent, it is a positive
development
. There are various examples that
proves
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prove
that
globalization
is a positive
development
.
To begin
with,
Globalization
has increased the job opportunities for young generations. If we compare the employment rate of our grandparent’s time to today’s globalized society, it must be hundred percent better. Multinational companies give us the opportunity to navigate different countries around the globe. Nowadays, it is very common to see people settle abroad for their office work or to complete a project, which could not be possible in the absence of
globalization
.
This
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This, further
further
, helps in understanding the culture of different countries.
For example
, foreigners working in
USA
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the USA
must be aware that Christmas and Halloween are the famous festival of US citizens and
likewise
outsiders who work in India knows that Diwali is the national festival of the country.
Another
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Other
impacts that proves that
globalization
has a positive impact towards
development
is that it increases nation's economy. If there is no boundary barriers, international companies set up their business in multiple countries, it would not only increase the job scope for the people of host
countries but
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countries, but
also
the profit of those companies would definitely add to
country’s gross income
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the country’s gross income
.
Thus
it helps in the
development
of countries.
For example
, the famous Japanese mobile company had recently launched its division in India,
thus
it will benefit India right from construction till it starts earning revenue. In conclusion, I do not see any negative impacts of
globalization
, it is a win-win situation for the companies as well as countries. As discussed earlier,
globalization
does not only expand
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has not only expanded
is not only expanding
the employment
opportunities but
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opportunities, but
also
makes it possible to share our culture and traditions. Along with that, it contributes a lot towards country
development
. In
short to
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short, to
a large extent,
globalization
is a positive
development
.
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