Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is correctly said that today's people are just to follow their traditional rituals and festivals. Even, they
donot
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do not
know the real meanings of these rituals or festivals. They just entertained
thenselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
by
odserving
quick to notice; showing quick and keen perception
observing
these. But, at the same time, there are some people
whu
the person or persons that; the one that
who
really celebrate these festivals by knowing their sacred truth.
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essay will discuss about both
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this point
these points
and give reasons for supporting these.
now-a-days
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Now-a-days
, people have a tendency to celebrate
everything even
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everything, even
though they
donot
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do not
know the actual meaning of it.
For example
, in India, Durga Puja is celebrated every year in some parts of the country.
This
type of
puja
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Puja
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lasts for 9 days. Here, we can see that most of the people
celebrate
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have celebrated
puja
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Puja
at home just to make fun or enjoy
theselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. Because, they want to show others how much money spend on decorations,
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large black-and-white herbivorous mammal of bamboo forests of China and Tibet; in some classifications considered a member of the bear family or of a separate family Ailuropodidae
pandas
bands
etc. Whereas, they even
donot
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do not
have the knowledge to follow the rituals. Whole night in 9 days they enjoyed with drinks, full of disco music etc.
Nevertheless
, there are some persons in society still have
remember
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remembered
every meaning behind all the
tradititonal
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
or religious festivals. These people always celebrate with great love and proper care.
For instance
, in India, especially in the state of Assam, when the mother gives birth,
then
after one month
form
a giver or sender
from
the birth, they celebrate it with some
traditinal
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
rituals, inviting elder people and take blessings from them.
As
other than what is under consideration or implied
Else
, there is a believe that, if these elderly people give their blessings to the baby,
then
there will be
rapid
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rapidly
growing of the baby. In
this
case, the question arises, why these
type
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types
of people still follow our traditional rituals? It is only their respect for our traditional respect that they never forget these till the
last
breath of their lives. To sum up, it is clearly
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stated
that though
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the plethora
a plethora
of
individualsspecially
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individuals specially
yuongsatrs
a young person of either sex
youngsters
donot
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do not
memorise our rituals, but still
wwe
plural of "I"
we
have some people who promptly memorise and
folloe
to travel behind, go after, come after
follow
these rituals and can give a life to these old beliefs.
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