Many museum charge for admission while many others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

Museums are educational places which are beneficial for the people in
societies
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the societies
.
However
,
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
, in some
museums
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museum
museum's
visitors are being charged for entrance, while many are free to go.
Eeven
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E even
though, charging
on
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for
entry may lead to
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
effects on people, but I think,
this
has far more positive points. To being with, making visitors pay an admission fee to the museum can have
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
on the society and
establishment
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the establishment
itself. Because, a museum is a blend of rich heritage and futuristic scientific advances, if free access is barred to
such
a
valueable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
informational
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informative
place, it can lead to public
out cry
a loud utterance; often in protest or opposition
outcry
.
For example
,
statiscal
of or relating to statistics
statistical
data on the annual visitors to the Victoria's art gallery in the Bahawalpur showed 40% reduction after implying ticket. It clearly demonstrates folks have distaste for
such
practices.
Moreover
, despite of aforementioned drawbacks, enforcing
tickets museums
Accept comma addition
tickets, museums
has
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have
a myriad advantages.
Firstly
,
such
earnings can cover their
over head
located or originating from above
overhead
business, like, personal cost, equipments, water and electricity bills.
Secondly
, a revenue would be generated which could be invested to upgrade the place, improve facilities to attract more visitors.
For instance
, out of many public places visited by myself, those who charge
entry feewere
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an entry fee were
entry fee were
well managed than those who do not.
Hence
it clearly reinstates applying some amount
on
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for
admission
benficial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for both the establishment and the people. In conclusion,
although
, I recognize that ticket sales can have a
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
effect on stakeholders in societies, but these figures are justifiable if they are spent on improvement effectively.
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