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Some people think that public health is the responsibility of government while others think that people should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Health
 has always been a cause of concern for every society and it is believed by some individuals that
government
 should be responsible for the public
healt
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 and well-being, but others are of the different view according to them it is their personal choice.
This
 essay will focus on both the views and according to my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 should
be combined effort
Suggestion
be a combined effort
 by both the authorities and individual. It is the duty of the
government
 to provide its citizen with good living standard and public
health
 is one of the major responsibility of the authorities for which it should encourage the people to adopt
healthy lifestyle
Suggestion
a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
 by spreading awareness through advertisement on billboards, digital advert etc.
Government
 should
subsidized
Suggestion
subsidize
 the rate of nutritional food and charge heavy taxes on junk food to discourage unhealthy eating,
moreover it
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moreover, it
 should create more playground and parks for the people and install exercise equipment in public grounds.
For e
Suggestion
Fore
.g. Authorities should organize the seminars and provide free consultation to people on major
health
 issue due to
sedantry lifestyle
Suggestion
a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyle
.
However
,
on the other
hand some
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hand, some
 people are of the opposite view as per their opinion
government
 should not be held responsible for the public
health
 it is personal choice of individual to decide what to eat and what not to eat and their freedom of choice should not be controlled by others and
government
 have other major issues at the hand to
tackle apart
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take, apart
take apart
 from creating the rules for the eating habit of the citizen, but due to awareness among people they have become more concerned about their
health
then
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than
 before and taking steps for the same. To conclude, according to my
opinion both
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opinion, both
 the
government
 and individual should be held responsible for the public
health
 and they should work in coordination to bring the changes in the
health
 standards and eating habits, authorities should encourage people for healthy eating and exercise regime through
awareness campaing
Suggestion
awareness campaigns
awareness campaign
an awareness campaign
 and individual should follow the strict rule for their betterment.
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