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Many people have health problems just because they lead unhealthy lifestyle. what are the reasons and possible solutions?

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These
days
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day
day's
days'
 issues regarding
health
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 are very common, owing to the unhealthy routing in daily life.
This
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 essay will discuss certain causes and possible measures of
this
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 negative development.
Firstly
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, the sedentary lifestyle is one of the main reasons of the poor
health
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. In the contemporary
world people
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world, people
 are becoming more workaholic, as they are spending excessive hours in workforce environment. Which in turn means, inactivity for long hours;
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, leading to
health
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 issues
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 as obesity and stress.
Secondly
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, opting for fast
food
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 rather than
home cooked meal
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a home cooked meal
 is another reason of
deteriorating
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the deteriorating health
health
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 of individuals.
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 is because people these days they are relying on fast
food
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 items which contain more fats and calorie-rich ingredients.
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, consuming less nutritional or high fats
food
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 result in unbalanced
food
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 intake in
body
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the body
;
hence
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, producing detrimental results on the
health
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 of people. There are certain
counteracts
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contracts
 in order to resolve
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 rising
health
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 concern. Daily workout is one of the solutions to cope with the bad
health
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. Opting for any physical activity
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 as running, walking or weight lifting for at least an hour daily increase the better working of all parts of the body; resulting in maintaining good
health
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. The international
health
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 organization of Toronto,
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, has revealed a study that individuals who opt for daily exercise is less likely to be inflicted by a
health
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 disease as compared to those who avoid to opt for exercising. Another way is by avoiding fast
food
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 in daily meal and taking nutritional diets.
Food
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 prepared at
homes
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home
 contains
less percentage
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a less percentage
the less percentage
 of fats, which would result in a high intake of rich nutritional diet and resultantly maintaining better
health
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. In conclusion, the prevalent poor
health
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 of people is mainly of inactive hours and unhealthy
food
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 choices.
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, doing exercise and taking healthy diet are the way to mitigate
this
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 issue.
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