More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, health related issue has become an important topic around the world. Recently, a trend was observed that more and more children are becoming overweight particularly in rich countries.
This
essay will discuss what causes overweight and its
outlaying
relatively far from a center or middle
outlying
effects. There are two primary reasons why children in
this
generation are becoming overweight. The
first
reason is
lack
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the lack
of physical movements. It is undeniably that children spent most of their time playing games in front of the computer, mobile phones, and other gaming devices rather playing sports.
For instance
, there are fewer number of children interested to join the varsity team of their school because they prefer to play at home rather than to practice in school. The
second
reason is
popularity
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the popularity
of fast foods. Fast food chains
offers
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offer
irresistibly flavourful foods that kids really like. In
recent study
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a recent study
recent studies
, children referred
to eat
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to eating
in
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at
fast food chains rather than the home cooked food as it is tastier and more appetising. Due to these reasons, children are becoming less physically
active contributing
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active, contributing
actively contributing
to the amount of fat being stored.
Also
, the preservatives that are added in the foods to give more flavours are actually additional fats and calories that we intake. If
this
trend will continue, these children might encounter a more critical illness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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