In many countries, people are not taking care of their elderly relatives but seeking the help of professionals to look after them or sending them to Old age homes. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Describe your views and give examples from your own life

Ageing is a natural process, which all human
being
Suggestion
beings
pass through. Taking help of
caregivers
has become common nowadays. People use their services in order to take
care
of their family members and relatives. To hire a professional to take
care
of older adults, and shelter homes for them should be considered as a positive development. Hiring professionals for older adults is becoming necessary in the recent century. At
this
age, most people suffer from different kinds of social and medical issues, like loneliness, depression, guilt,
overthinking
and other kinds of medical problems like diabetes, BP, heart problems and neurological issues. They think in
such
type of
satuations
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situations
; mild negligence can lead to a bigger problem.
For example
, for the paralysed patient in developing countries, it is impossible for a family member to give them proper
care
and attention. They always need some professional to provide them with appropriate
care
. In, old age houses, all facilities are available, an adequate diet with
care
and substance to keep them busy. But there are mild adverse effects which can not be overlooked. In
this
age, older people want love,
care
and attention from their families. They
can not
can not
cannot
trust anyone else. They want to share their experiences, memories with their people and if the family is unable to give them enough time they may suffer from more anxiety. In 2007, a research published by Asian times showed that the recovery rate among older people who are fully supported was higher,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
people living in nursing homes. In conclusion, I firmly believe that positive effects are more than adverse effects. We are living in the 21st century, and all of us are dealing with our problems. So, in
this
busy schedule, proper
care
, time and attention cannot be given to them.
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