Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must solve this problem, others believe that human beings are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It’s argued that people must tackle the issue related to the
extinction
of numerous animals, while others think that humanity should be prioritized.
Although
many urgent
mankind
Suggestion
mankind's
problems need
most resources
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the most resources
to solve, I believe that preserving the animal
world
to remain the balance of nature is more essential. People believe that the human race should be placed on the top because
authorities
Suggestion
the authorities
need to prioritize their funding for global issues threatening directly human life.
In other words
, the humankind is facing various problems,
such
as climate change and air pollution, affecting directly to human life which solving
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
required governments and people to concentrate all the resource.
For example
, a report of U.N.
organization
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Organization
in 2017 showed that countries have to spend at least 100 million dollars to set up a
natural
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nature
reserve and
this
amount can help millions of poor people overcome their hunger.
However
, I believe that men and women must conserve the potential extinct animal due to its critical role in the natural
world
.
On the other hand
, some argued that state authorities and people urgently protect the animal species facing
extinction
because these creatures play a vital role in the natural cycle. And the
extinction
of these cannot recover, which damages
to
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for
the balance of the natural
world
and causes many negative consequences to the Earth and human beings,
such
as rocketing a particular species population or depleting many food chains.
For instance
, the mass
extinction
of the lion in Australia helps to increase the Kanguru population to a dangerous level and
this
affects the farm crops.
Moreover
, I believe that governments, businesses, and people should protect the animal
world
,
thus
the younger generation doesn’t need to learn many animal species through books. In conclusion, while some believe that humanity is the
first
priority due to many human life threats which need concentrating many resources, I believe that people and authorities have to seek for solutions of the extinct animal to maintain the natural
world
in a balanced stance.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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