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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life.  Why do you think that is the case?   What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Some people succeed in
life
 despite they fail in
school
.In the
further
esaay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
say
 I am going to write about the reasons for
this
 and
also
 about the most important feature a person should possess to succeed in
life
.   We see many incidents where people fail in their schools, but become successful in
life
.The reasons for
this
 are
firstly
 because, children might be interested in some other fields like sports, business, music and other kinds of arts, rather than studies. So eventually in the future they
succeed
Suggestion
will succeed
 in the profession of their interest and
passion
.
For instance
, consider Sachin Tendulkar, the most successful player  in the history of cricket, had
also
 failed in 10th standard.
Second reason
Suggestion
A second reason
The second reason
Second reasons
 for
school
 flunked children becoming successful in
life
 is
,
Accept space
,
their appetite for being creative and developing leadership skills, whereas in
school
 a child got to be obedient and follow the instructions of teachers, which can hamper kid's creativity and leadership skills. According to me, the most vital feature required in a person to succeed in
life
 is to possess
passion
 for a
perticular
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
feild
record in a public office or in a court of law
filed
failed
field
, which motivates a person to dedicate himself to his profession and
also
 it ignites
strong desire
Suggestion
a strong desire
 to excel in the profession and
also
 in his
life
.
For example
, consider Akshay Kumar, who is very successful and popular actor in Indian film industry, who
also
 happened to be
failure
Suggestion
a failure
 in his
school
.It was all his
passion
 for acting that brought him so far. In conclusion, some people succeed in
life
 even though they fail in
school
 because of their interest and
passion
 for other
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
 and
also
 because of their hunger to be creative and develop leadership skills. Being passionate about a
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
 is the most important asset to succeed in
life
.
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