Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Recently children have to deal with increase pressure from different aspects of lives
for instance
education, relationship and finances. The problem is caused by unnecessary competition with peers and being overly engrossed in social media platforms.
This
essay will proffer solutions to the challenges stated above. About two decades ago, a child concern was limited to food, clothes and playing basically but now the reverse is the case. Children
are now engage
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now engage
in unhealthy competitions they want to outdo their school mates in every way.
Furthermore
, youngster overly indulge in social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram and Snapchat where they meet people from different background and it is a norm for them to upload pictures, displaying affluence which pressures others from humble backgrounds to want to meet up
.
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.
When they cannot handle
this
pressure they might develop an inferiority
complex which
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complex, which
can lead to depression and even commit suicide.
For instance
, a fresh year student of the University of Lagos attempted suicide and it was revealed that he has
being
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been
acting weird and always on Facebook. Parental guidance and proper upbringing can help a child build his or her self confidence and reduce the tendency of depression.
Also
,
school
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the school
a school
schools
should have guidance and
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
sessions that will educate
teenager
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teenagers
a teenager
on the benefits of mingling with
good friend
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good friends
a good friend
.
Furthermore
, the government should enact laws that will regulate the use of social media platforms among boys and girls of below 18. In conclusion, though children now have to handle several pressures in
different facet
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different facets
of their lives, which are caused majorly by the influence of social networking platforms and the needless competition among them. Yet these trend can be curbed by parental guidance, enlighten from schools and propagation of relevant laws
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