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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In many nations, an increasing amount of people
are opting
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is opting
 to live alone. While there are negative effects on the person, there are many positive ones too. In
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 essay, pros and cons of choosing to live alone will be discussed. There
are
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 a plethora of advantages of living alone, as, they would become independent in almost every sense. They would learn how to be own their own and how to handle themselves.
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, paying their
own rent
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own, rent
 or cooking food and so on. Not only that, but they would
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 have more personal space and privacy for themselves, and
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 have more time that they can spend to become a better person.
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, they don't have to adjust for the others with whom they would have been living with.
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, if someone is a night owl and would like to sleep late at night, if they choose to live alone, they don't have to worry that, they might disturb the other person's sleep.
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, there are
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 disadvantages that
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 has to consider if they are going to live alone. They might feel lonely sometimes as there is no
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 else living there, and they might not have anyone to talk to, the majority of the time, which some people might not prefer.
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, they might lose the habit of sharing their things and adjusting with and for others, which are two of the most important characteristics that
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 should have. They might
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 lose sight of what they are doing, as, there is no
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 else living along with them to advise them to stop.
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, they might stay up late at night as there is no requirement of adjusting, and
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 get insufficient sleep which would be bad for their health. In conclusion, an increasing number of people are choosing to live on their own, and though there are negative effects of
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 decision, the positive ones outweigh as the individuals would gain independence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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