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Genetic engineering for both medical and agricultural purposes is causing increasing amount of controversy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering and explain your opinion.

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By developing our science, we are capable of using genetic modification in agriculture or using genetic engineering in health care. All new approaches from the ancient, have their own risks and benefits for human life. There is no exaptation for genetic engineering. for
this
 new technology, I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. By improving our health care, the average life span has grown and more
people
 are living on Earth. More
people
 more mouths to feed. Our planet doesn’t have enough resources to provide enough material and nutrients for folks. So what we should do? Killing each other for
food
? We should find a way that solve
this
 problem. Genetically modified crops resist cold weather and pests.
This
 solution is one of the achievements of Genetic engineering, another thing is man-made meat
that is
 produced by humans in laboratories. These are sustainable approaches which are important for humans.
Food
 plays a key role in our lives. Without
food
, there is no human history any more. We should learn how to survive in the new area and eating genetically modified crops or meat is one of our obligation to live on the Earth. Anything has its own disadvantages. Many religious
people
 believe that changing flora or fauna genes is a kind of manipulating nature. So they think
this
 is not valid and it’s immoral. Another thing that grabs
people
's attention is eating manipulated crops or foods has many consequences
such
 as cancer or stomach ache. Some doctors said that
this
 kind of
food
 is not suitable for the human body and more
people
 become aware of the consequences. These negative impacts on lives and benefits are mentioned, showing that anything in
this
 world has both sides of the effects. Manipulating genes is the permanent way of producing
food
 but it has negative impacts on our lives
such
 as diseases. But positives are more than negatives.
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that your arguments are fully developed with specific examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical errors and improve sentence construction to enhance clarity and readability.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more varied sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and sophisticated.
task achievement
Consider addressing opposing viewpoints more deeply to show a balanced understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Work on making transitions between paragraphs smoother to maintain a logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay presents both advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering, showing an understanding of the topic.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states the writer’s opinion that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
supported main points
The essay includes specific points about the benefits of genetically modified crops and man-made meat, demonstrating awareness of relevant examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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