In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Some ponder that it is unjust that in a majority of nations, higher wages are paid for top members of companies; as opposed to juniors. I completely disagree with
this
statement because it is the supervisor/ consultant level that bears the burden of responsibility in making a company successful. To elaborate
further
, the success of an institution is reliant on striving towards a clear vision and having effective alternative
fall-back
to break off a military action with an enemy
fallback
options
at
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in
times of trouble shooting. In order for
this
to take place,
experienced qualified
Accept comma addition
experienced, qualified
leaders are mandatory. And it goes without saying that it is
this
top-rung of personnel that will be taking profound risks to ensure tasks get done.
For example
, Dr. Hans of
Dialog
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Dialogue
Axiata is said to be given a salary of 5 million rupees. And it would be easy for an onlooker to comment that he does less hours in the office;
however
, at a time of crisis, he will be the one facing the wrath of the shareholders, and
additionally
, be the person to
strategize
a path out of the chaos.
Therefore
, justifying the cash flow for the risk taken.
On the contrary
, newer or less experienced employees work harder and possibly for longer hours.
Moreover
, the quantity of work done might not seem to be proportionate to the pay check. Reasonably,
this
might be why some say that it is injustice.
Although
,
this
is a fair point; taking into account a family
unit
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unit, for
for example
, if the children were to run the household for a week, what would be the outcome? To conclude, it takes time, age, experience and maturity to spearhead a workplace and prevent it from collapse; and it is for
this
reason that top jobs
are paid
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have paid
the enormous cash.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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