In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some of young students now are encouraged to join some work or going to an occasion for a year in between

end

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the end

of their schooling and beginning of university studies. In my

opinion

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opinion, this

this

is leads to get lacking in their studies and some of them are loosing interest

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farther

to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)

further

education. I think many of the students are continuing the

colleges

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college

college's

life

after completing school that saving their

time

due to that.

Also

every

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Every

student wants to do the same since they don't get deviate in other activities. More than that they will complete their desired course at

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the right time

time

and can do work on that easily. And they can reach their goals

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perfect

time

. I want to share one person experience which I have seen, one of younger cousin immediately started his college after school with

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the perfect future plan

a perfect future plan

perfect future plans

he was already decided what course want to study and which

job

he like to do everything with

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a perfect plan

by the end his dreams come true. In other

hand some

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hand, some

students are having long trip more over, few of them doing

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the job

a job

Well I

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think doing

job

gives experience and make

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people

the person

a person

responsible but

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responsible, but

, those

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jobs

are just permitted to that level. Having a graduation degree

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is very important in everyone's life also given

also very important in everyone's life gives

is very important in everyone's life also give

life

also

give more respect in society. Some teenagers are addicted to travelling these

days but

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days, but

it's all waste

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it's all a waste

time

. Having fun in

life

is not

wrong but

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wrong, but

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has

some limits for it, if extended to peak it goes wrong.

More over

in addition

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, they loose concentration on studies. I have seen one of my schoolmate he is very rich in money that made him irresponsible, after completing our schooling we all started

college but

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college, but

he didn't, he

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takes

a long trip to different places after 1 year his parents asked him to join in University for Higher education but he just said I'm not interested in studies rather than I will do business. But now he is not doing any business or work. I conclude that taking long break after schooling makes some students lazy and their thoughts go beyond study because in that age we don't know what is

life

so parents want to guide them.

Finally continuing

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Finally, continuing

farther

to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)

further

studies without long break makes

person

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a person

perfect to reach their desired destination at

right

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the right time

time

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