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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (cam 14 test 1)

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It is true that there are always the inevitable ups and downs in life and some even argue that difficulties like job dissatisfaction or poverty are acceptable.
This
 idea provokes strong arguments, which I will discuss here. On the one hand, those who support the idea of accepting bad circumstances claim that
this
 appears to happen to almost everyone on a universal level. In the workplace,
for instance
, many employees and workers are likely to have a tendency towards disliking their current jobs due to lots of reasons ranging from low
paycheck
, extremely high pressure to inappropriate working context.
However
,
such
 people frequently face a dilemma of whether to put themselves and their family at risk of hunger or homelessness or to continue their unsatisfactory positions.
This
 is particularly true in the present economic situation.
Hence
, to the supporters of allowing unwanted situations, these viewpoints are convincing.
However
, I tend to side with those who argue that it is possible to change our undesirable status. People who refuse to make any improvements or changes to a bad situation seems to be too afraid to step out of their comfort zone, and it is impossible for them to see the opportunities rather than obstacles and difficulties.
For example
, a decision to resign from my 9-to-5 office desk job was one of the most rewarding actions that I have ever made in life which leads to a completely
satisfactory
Suggestion
satisfying
 new career path as a full-time teacher. Again, I do believe that if an individual is not satisfied with their current circumstances,
such
 as work or financial issue, he or she could definitely improve their objectionable reality by starting
working
Suggestion
work
 on their lifelong dream on a daily basis
instead
 of worrying about failure or being unemployed. In conclusion, I can understand why some people might accept their bad situations and hardship, but it seems to me that it is far more beneficial to chase your dreams rather than be obsessive about work or money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Acceptance
  • Contentment
  • Stress relief
  • Peace of mind
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Opportunities
  • Stagnation
  • Lack of progress
  • Improvement
  • Motivation
  • Effort
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