Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places

In recent years, digitization has impacted our lives, and it has changed almost everything, even
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our reading habits/the way we communicate with people.
Technology
has opened new avenues in the way we communicate with another person situated anywhere on the globe. It has enabled us to connect and share information with people irrespective of their location.
This
advancement in
technology
makes it easier for us to find and befriend like-minded people. In my opinion,
this
growth can make people feel socially active and more willing to engage in conversation with new people.
On the other hand
,
technology
takes away the physical aspect of communication. Though it has made life
easier it
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easier, it
has taken out the aspect of physical presence which was essential to communicate with another person in the past.
This
limitation can make people feel an absence of the human touch and can take away from the clarity of a message. Communicating through messaging or phone can only go as far as getting the words across. We human beings are social animals and need to connect with other beings in their physical form in order to feel a deep connection. One always has the option to ignore social interactions online, but it’s harder to do that in real life. I feel that
technology
doesn’t allow for
deep
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deeper
connections to be built because of the above limitations. To summarize,
technology
can be used to build
newer
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new
connections at one’s own comfort and
pace
the state prevailing during the absence of war
peace
, but its limitations don’t allow for deep lifelong relationships to blossom. The effect that social networking sites have on societies and local community can only be termed as negative. Rather than individual people taking part in
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the local community
, they are indeed choosing to take more interest in people online.
Consequently
, the people within the local community are no longer forming close or supportive relationships.
Furthermore
, society is becoming increasingly disjoint and fragmented as people spend more time online.
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