Schools concentrate for too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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Nowadays teaching
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Nowadays, teaching
the traditional subjects have become controversial debate where everyone
have
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has
their own valid points. Some people claim that these conventional subjects are inadequate for learning while others believe that these are imperative for
future
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the future
. In my view,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely disagree with the subjects
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in
school curriculum
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the school curriculum
because at some stage of life, every
subjects
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subject
play
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plays
significant role
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a significant role
and a person can develop better insight. On one hand, the subjects
for
instance calculus
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instance, calculus
, derivatives do not helps a student to face world's reality.
In other words
, theoretical learning is not only sufficient to overcome the life's problem.
Furthermore
, subjects which demand our existence like physical education, arts and crafts are of them which have improved the vision for
future
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the future
.
Consequently
, theoretical learning
have degraded
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has degraded
the quality of
education system
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the education system
by forcing them to study, for which they have no interests. Like if a person wants to become
wrestler
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a wrestler
,
then
maths and science have no role in it. On
other hand
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the other hand
, these conventional subjects have their own essence and significance. It has been
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on
the syllabus since ancient time because it entitled everything
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about
world
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the world
.
Instead
of
focus
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focusing
focussing
only in one field, it's good to have
understanding
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an understanding
of other fields.
Moreover
, these subjects will
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
better understanding which prepare students to face any situations in their life. They can
also
understand others perspective easily like social skills.
For example
, to being
doctor
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a doctor
, their subjective knowledge is mandatory as well as he should
also
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be
been
awared
a grant made by a law court
awarded
award
from others
field
fail to do something; leave something undone
failed
to cure patients. In conclusion, traditional subjects have their own charisma of culture, city and
world
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the world
and even comprise the information of
universe
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the universe
a universe
which actually have improved young person's
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mental
capacity and give them exposure rather than to focus only one field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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