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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •give details about the concert •describe how you won the tickets •explain why youʼve chosen your friend to go with you.

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Dear Alisa, I am writing to invite you to a
concert
. I will be very happy If you go to the
concert
 with me. I won two tickets to the famous singer Jah Khalibʼs
concert
 in a lucky game and I wanted to invite you too.
Firstly
,
this
concert
 will be very amazing and full of energy because there will be one of the
famous
Correct quantifier usage
most famous
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 people. Guests from foreign countries
also
 come to the
concert
. It was not easy to win the tickets because you had to bet on the game and I bet $100 and it doubled and I won tickets as prizes. Why I chose you because when I go to
concert
 with you I never get bored. If I am with you my day will be
enjoy it
Wrong verb form
enjoyable
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. I hope you will accept my offer. See you at the
concert
. Yours sincerely, Nigina
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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve the coherence and cohesion of your letter, consider adding more transitional phrases or sentences to connect your ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. This could help the letter feel more fluid and polished.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct idea or piece of information. You've done well here, but clarifying and expanding each idea further could strengthen your letter.
Task Achievement
To enhance task achievement, offer more detailed descriptions in each section of your letter. For instance, you could provide more specifics about the concert (e.g., the concert date, venue, or what makes the singer or the event special).
Task Achievement
While your writing tone is suitable for an informal letter to a friend, you should always proofread your letter to correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for clarity. This will make your invitation more compelling and enjoyable to read.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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