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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
Media became
an
Suggestion
a
 vital role in sharing the information regarding various aspects. One of
such
 is famous
people
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person's
life
. Each and every person wish to have some
personal
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personality
, which they don'
t
 want to know to the world. Even the celebrities wish to have their own personal
life
, which was not happening because of
media
Suggestion
the media
. For
ecample
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, a Prince Diana had a
boy friend
a man who is the lover of a girl or young woman
boyfriend
 and was going to marry him. For TRP ratings
,
Accept space
,
it was exposed by television. They followed her in order to become famous,
aganist
 to her will, and lead to
worst
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bad
worse
 consequences. Everyone has their own personal
life what ever
Accept comma addition
life, whatever
life whatever
 status they are
into
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in
. Some wish to make it private to some extend and others don'
t
. The exposure of
someone
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someone's
someones
 personal
life
 should be
promising but
Accept comma addition
promising, but
 not problematic to them. No one should be sorry for being famous. Some wish to expose their love to the world and some won'
t
 be, it doesn'
t
 mean that they are doing something
wrong but
Accept comma addition
wrong, but
 they don'
t
 want to because of unknown problem they have. If it was projected to the world,
may be
by chance
maybe
 everyone is
happy but
Accept comma addition
happy, but
 may not the actual people. To conclude, Media should have their barriers in making famous
people
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person's
life
 public. We should respect their personal
life
 and
need
Suggestion
needs
 to provide some space for them, not making it public, if they don'
t
 to others to know.
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