TOPIC : Advertising discourages us from being individuals by making us all look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Our

individuality gets

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individuality, gets

lost and we belong to the same platform as judged by the world of adverts. I totally agree

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with

this

viewpoint that advertising fails to encourage us in taking our own decisions and thereby loses the originality. The world of adverts is very tempting and people get attracted towards the new upcoming products launched by the marketing companies. Any new product in the beginning is sold at a lower price so that

public

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the public

can buy it without knowing the product entirely.

Similarly

, any excess products which did not make major profits in the market

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always come with mouthwatering discount offers. These are all set to be deceptive to the consumers and all people look alike with the loss of their individuality and the idea of critical thinking. The advertising media

has engulfed

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have engulfed

the entire population with their marketing

strategies spreading

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strategies, spreading

at a faster speed than common men are capable of thinking.

Moreover

, the advert videos shown

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television have celebrities like

sportstars

someone who is dazzlingly skilled in any field

superstars

or actors featuring in it. When superstars can be easily fooled by the allowances given by the companies

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there is no doubt that

general public

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the general public

will follow their footsteps as they are thought to be the role models in their lives. We all are

then

categorized to a common platform and lose our identity in seeking the correct product. The greed for money may be one of the root causes behind

this

mentality and somehow

paralyzes

loss of the ability to move a body part

paralyses

our analytical minds. The advertising media

has successfully managed

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have successfully managed

to cripple mankind with their enormous business tactics

that undoubtedly

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that, undoubtedly

, has made us lose our identity and genuineness. To conclude, the advertising world has not motivated us in any aspects and people now lie at the same level. I strongly support

this

idea, since marketing companies have taken control over the minds of the people with their

business strategic

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business, strategic

business strategy

business strategies

policies which has jeopardized our thinking capability and thereby loss of originality.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

323 words

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TOPIC : Advertising discourages us from being individuals by making us all look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that it is the best to save money, for exemple in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach on opinion on this debate

You are being harassed wrongly by Debt Collection Agency for the amount that you did not spend on your credit card. Write a letter to Banking Ombudsman Department and escalate the complaint. In your letter, • introduce yourself • describe what happened • say what you want the officer to do

Some think that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together. Others, however, think that hosting the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people focus on news in their country, while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.