Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

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Celebrities are the one who has

acheived

to gain with effort

achieved

in their sector, they have

choosen

one who is the object of choice; who is given preference

chosen

. Media coverage regarding their life became common nowadays. Most of us are interested to know about them because they are role models for us. In the above case, they

maybe

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may be

children who are going to follow the news.

This

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may create

negative impact

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a negative impact

on them. Let consider the situation like, A sports start, quite his school in tenth grade and after intense dedication he became famous.

With

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this

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point they may be chances of children not concentrating on their studies and trying to focus more on sports. In

this

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case they may end up in

miserable life

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a miserable life

, if they haven'

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reached their goal in sports.

Secondly

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, Film

star

(astronomy) a celestial body of hot gases that radiates energy derived from thermonuclear reactions in the interior

Star

, If

Suggestion

media cover regarding the Film star, it will be good to know about him, but at the same time they need to say regarding the

hurdels

a footrace in which contestants must negotiate a series of hurdles

hurdles

hardest

that he has undergone in

this

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life to

acheive

to gain with effort

achieve

that

poistion

the particular portion of space occupied by something

position

. If they haven'

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done as

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so, then

then

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children will get misguide and tend to move into that area.

For example

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, Arnold S, who is

reknown artist

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a renown artist

renown artist

renowned artist

from

hollywood

the film industry of the United States

Hollywood

industry, is famous for his body attire. Most of the kids got inspired from him and started workouts. Very few of them tend to

acheive

to gain with effort

achieve

his structure,

Meanwhile rest

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the Meanwhile, rest

the Meanwhile rest

of them end up either with body damages, because of

misguidence

Wrong guidance

misguidance

, or else addicted to drugs, as they

cann'

can not

can't

cannot

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perform those intense

excersie

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

. If

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Media

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Medium

has taken care of information they are sharing by providing both positives and negatives

then

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this

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wouldn'

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have happened. So information sharing by respective channels, need to take care of impacts that are going to happen. In Conclusion, If TV programme's are telecasting the information about famous

presonality

the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual

personality

then

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they should not project their

acheivement's but

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achievements, but

achievements but

also

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the

hurdels

a footrace in which contestants must negotiate a series of hurdles

hurdles

hordes

hardest

that have faced, so that children will be knowing the problem to

acheive

to gain with effort

achieve

their goals.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

Celebrity culture
Glamorization
Unrealistic expectations
Self-esteem
Scandals
Role models
Moral development
Mental health
Influence
Exposure
Social media platforms
Charity work
Inappropriate behavior
Perfection image
Negative impact
Inspire children

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