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Band 6.5

Your local newspaper would like to have a new regular weekly feature on a subject of interest for readers. Readers are being encouraged to make suggestions sent in an e-mail to the newspaper. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: Suggest a topic that you think would be popular. Say why it would be of interest Explain why it is more relevant/interesting than other topics

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Dear Sir, Hope
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 letter finds you well are in the best spirits. I am writing
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 letter to express my suggestions regarding the new weekly feature for your newspaper. As we know, many individuals lack
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interest in reading. So, to boost their reading skills, I would highly recommend the addition of a "healthy lifestyle", which can be a great idea for leading a better and healthier life. People are consuming fast food and fizzy drinks a lot on a daily basis. And by describing the bad impacts of eating junk food and home-made food on their health, will definitely increase their interest in reading about that particular topic.
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, we will add a daily routine
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 as a morning walk, light exercise before eating etcetera which they can follow to become physically fit. I think
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 idea would be more relevant than others because everybody is more concerned about their health and they do not like to make any kind of compromise with their body. I hope you will include my suggestions and add them to your weekly feature. I am eagerly waiting for a response from your side. Yours faithfully, Sam.

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greeting and closing
Consider rephrasing the greeting for better clarity, such as 'I hope this letter finds you in good health and spirits.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow by clearly linking each paragraph to the main topic.
single idea per paragraph
Focus on one idea per paragraph to enhance clarity and focus on key points.
task achievement
You clearly identified a topic of interest and provided relevant reasons.
greeting and closing
Your closing statement indicates a positive and respectful tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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