These days many children spend a lot of their time playing computer games but little time doing sports. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent years, digitization has had a severe impact, especially on children. The impact of urbanization and modernization has been very severe, and

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has led children being addicted to online

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video games

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promote over another

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of outdoor sports. The essay will discuss reasons responsible for

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a development along with the negative aspects pertaining to the issue.

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with, urbanization has resulted in elimination of playgrounds from cities and towns.

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has resulted in the construction of shopping malls and huge buildings.

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, children do not have the necessary place to play outdoor sports.

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, a survey in Mumbai revealed that approximately 40% of open land was used for construction purposes, since the start of the millennium.

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, the security of children is another issue as parents are wary to send them outside to play. So, parents engage their children by letting them play online video games.

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, studies have shown that playing video games for a

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long

time is known to have a detrimental effect on the child’s body.

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it enhances mental learning skills, but is

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known to have an effect on physical and other mental activities.

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, studies have established a clear relationship that a sedentary lifestyle leads to obesity in children.

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, physical activity helps a child in the development of cognitive abilities like decision making and problem solving.

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, sports

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also teaches

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also teach

various other like lessons like team management, working in a group and ability to take success and failure alike. To conclude,

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playing video games keep children engaged for hours, it does not overall help in their development.

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, I strongly believe that spending too much time playing online games is harmful for the upcoming generation.

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