Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development?

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markedly new or introducing radical change

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change in means of

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a mutual or reciprocal action; interacting

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in traction

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introduction

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Now

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people are much more connected than

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ever before

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makes no

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the quality of being unlike or dissimilar

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that it's an office work or

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informal

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meeting, you

can observe the impact of modern gadgets everywhere.

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have created more strongest

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fastest and easiest

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mutual dealings or connections or communications among persons or groups

relations

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thus

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emphasize

that it's a productive contribution in mankind lifestyle.

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No doubt

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modern technology has changed the world into a "global hut". When we glance at few decades back

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we realized that people had fewer methods to contact with

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of them or themselves

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friends and relatives living at

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a distance

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the literary culture

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and sending telegrams were only two

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, these were time consuming as well as less secure means.

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, people didn't prefer to go far for study and even for wedding and

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a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

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we have

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just in one click.

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be more obvious, we have portable devices with thousands and thousands of applications.

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has made our interaction well -

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sending a formal massage or watching your friends are not a big deal

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have many apps, by using them we can watch

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my husband is living in

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perceive by sight or have the power to perceive by sight

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269 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Interpersonal relationships
Social networking
Virtual communication
Emotional depth
Long-distance connectivity
Cultural exchange
Social isolation
Face-to-face interaction
Non-verbal cues
Cyberbullying
Digital etiquette
Social media platforms
Professional networking
Online communities
Marginalized groups
Cyber relationships

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Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extent do you agree?

Many people think that money is important to achieve happiness. What is the importance of money to happiness? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

The only way to improve safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree with this idea?

Psychological illnesss may not be as obvious as phyisical disability or illness , nevertheless they are just as disable in their own way society , with physical than psychology illness or disabilities .