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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #projects #wildlife
Some people believe that
government
 consume a lot of money in saving wild animals through various projects. Whereas, other problems like
poverty
 and hygiene needs a dire attention
from
Suggestion
of
 the authority. In my opinion, I agree that human’s lives should be on top priority
instead
 of animals.
Firstly
,
poverty
 is the cancer in
society
 which force people to die,
therefore
 the
government
 should solve
such
 problems
on
Suggestion
with
 prime levels. Low income levels as compare with the market needs
raise
Suggestion
to raise
 the problems for a common man and
thus
 increasing their hurdles day by day,
therefore
government
Suggestion
the government
 should increase their wages to support their daily needs.
For instance
, In India, around 10 percent of the nation’s population are living below
poverty
 levels.
Hence
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should raise funds to overcome the
poverty
 issues.
Secondly
, sanitation and hygiene are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 factors where
government
 attention is much needed to support the disease free environment for the public. Hygiene is necessary to save the lives of human from deadly infections. These projects
needs
Suggestion
need
 dire attention and huge amount of money to control the spread of infections and maintaining cleanness.
For instance
, during every monsoon the malaria cases upsurge in
Indian subcontinent
Suggestion
the Indian subcontinent
 and cause number of deaths.
Therefore
, the
government
 should educate public on disinfection system and construct proper draining in the
society
, which will make the
society
 safer and
clean
Suggestion
cleaner
. In conclusion, humans should be priorities against animals and the authorities should have more focus on disease free environment and the development of human
society
 rather than spending money on saving wild animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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