Some individuals view music as a great means of uniting people of diverse cultural backgrounds and ages together. This essay completely agrees with this opinion because it not only improve human relationships but also play therapeutic roles

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A good reason why I agree that melodies can bring people of different backgrounds together is that it makes people to relate
with
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to
each other better. As an example, people who share a common interest are more likely to listen to similar genre of
music
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when they meet with one another.
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, it helps to cement relationships and foster better bonds when they are played at occasions.
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, a popular musical carnival in my village brings together people of different age grades and culture to wine and dine together every year. The event is so enjoyable that many people look forward to attending with their friends who are
live
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living
overseas. Another reason why I agree is that, it has a therapeutic effect on the listeners. According to a quote by a popular American artist
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he said "
music
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is the greatest medicine of the mind and soul" and I concur because when people listen to tunes, they tend to forget their worries, many
dance
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dances
away their sorrows on listening to their favourite
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.
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, many Nigerians I know, admits that whenever the popular
popstar
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pop star
, Akon, sings on stage they perceive a healing effect on them which eases their worry.
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, they like to attend
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performances with their friends and family members. In conclusion,
music
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, which has both the capacity to improve human relationships as well as therapeutic roles, is a powerful tool to bring individual of various origin and ages together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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