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n today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Owing to the increases in the family"s expenditures.Some people think that both the father and the mother need to have a job.
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, there are others who believe that parents support it is more important than extra income.I will discuss both sides of the argument and I will summaries my personal conclusion.
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 the one hand, a plenty number of people think that having both parents working is a necessary these days.Many things become more expensive than it used to be in the past, people safer, to receive what they require in their daily life.
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, I have had to rent a house in the city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and that had cost me a lot of
money
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, which it is almost impossible to afford with
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 one salary, because of that two of them need to go out to work.
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, in my point of view, another reason is to give their children a good education.Without two of them working
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 things cannot be done.
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, there is some people believe that they needed at lest one of the parents with them.They have felt lack supported due to their parent"s absence.
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,
money
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 could be important, but not more than spending time together.Indeed, not having their parents around could have had a bad effect on them.
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, I have personally read a study that has claimed that children with personality problems had spent less time with their parents.I think
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 can be a good reason for parents to start thinking about the most important thing to them, their kids. In conclusion, parents need to put their kids
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, making a good
money
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 it is a good thing for the family.
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, having time for them it is as important as making
money
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