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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Educational
instistution's
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
 play an important role in each and
everyones
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everyone's
everyone
 life.They provide the information, which is
foundation
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the foundation
a foundation
 for the future. Its
an
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a
 welcome move if they are going to make it. Lets discuss in detail regarding the same. Nowadays, both the parents are working, in order to provide better facilities
to
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for
 their children. But they forgot that they are neglecting their kids, without spending
time
Use synonyms
 with them.
if
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If
 school
are going
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is going
 to provide training on how to become
an
Suggestion
a
 responsible father or mother
then
Linking Words
 it's not only good for their future but
also
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 for their
next
Linking Words
 generation. Each father or mother should teach their child
with
Suggestion
to
 how to behave with various people like stranger, friends and
won
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
one
 family. They
also
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 should teach them what not to do,
for example
Linking Words
, they should say to them not to smoke, drink and not to tease anyone.
Linking Words
Moreover
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Moreover, this
this
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 little
people
Suggestion
person
 should know how to balance their
proffessional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
 and family live. It
can't be learn
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can't be learned
can't be learnt
 in a short
time
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, so they need to be given input from childhood, so that they will ready when
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time
Suggestion
the time
 arrives. Not only
do but
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do, but
also
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donot's
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do not's
 should
also
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 be taught,
then
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 only they can lead in
better way
Suggestion
a better way
. In conclusion, It's not
only reponsibility
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the only responsibility
only responsibility
 of teaching
sector but
Accept comma addition
sector, but
also
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 each parent and those who are major too.
As
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At
 most of the
time
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, as a student, they spend more
time
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 in it, so it will better
to have
Suggestion
have
 major information from them.
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