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Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

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As more of us are increasingly commute back and forth internationally due to globalization and cheap flights, some might claim that travelling does improve the appreciation for each country. Personally, I absolutely agree with
this
 assertion and those avid travellers indeed understand and show greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home. There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs.
Firstly
, as travellers go to isolated untouched parts of the world, stay with locals and learn about their culture and way of life,
this
 no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between people from different backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family,
for instance
, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon
tribal
Suggestion
tribe
.
Secondly
, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not share the same values can indeed make a difference to people’s prejudice toward a unique convention,
thus
 encourage us to appreciate it.
On the other hand
, those people prefer to stay in one place might argue that it is by no means necessary to travel to each place in order to treasure the value of some distant communities. They point to modern technology,
such
 as the computer and the Internet which allow people to look into the outside world without leaving their desks.
However
, it is no doubt true that not all traditions and tribal lifestyles can be found on the Internet. In fact, there are some tribes living completely separate from the rest of the world and the only solution to know and appreciate those people is to meet them in person and stay with them for a period of time. In conclusion, it appears to me that travel does help us all to show respect to different cultures and I do not believe that modern inventions could fully assist us to achieve
this
 desirable aim.
Submitted by eltonlee on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exposes
  • directly
  • appreciate
  • appreciation
  • respect
  • open-mindedness
  • adaptability
  • navigate
  • social norms
  • lifestyles
  • diversity
  • interactions
  • stereotypes
  • preconceived notions
  • nuanced
  • shift attitudes
  • aesthetic
  • landscapes
  • architectures
  • engagement
  • superficial
  • commercialized
  • conscious
  • respectful
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