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Some school work or travel for a period of time instead of going directly to the university.what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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The
gap
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year
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 is a
year
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 after high
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school which
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school, which
 students use to explore their various
interest
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interests
. Some may prefer to work while others travel to various places. After the
gap
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year
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 the student
may decides
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may decide
 to go on with their career. Merits and demerit of
gap
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year
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 will be discussed. Many students usually work within
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 period of
time
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 so as to raise money to
further
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 their education as high
school
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 is known to be so
expensive and
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expensive, and
this
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 helps to raise
financial burden
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the financial burden
off
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of
 their parents shoulder.
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, it gives students
time
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 to introspect and consider fields they might have never had interest to study before now.
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, as many would prefer to work others may wish to travel to different parts of the world and explore new things
,
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,
learn different cultures and Languages
,
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,
meet people and
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 make friends.
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 gives them a better idea of the outside world and improves their personality.
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, activities done during the
gap
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year
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 can be added to the students resume to boast it for more jobs after
school
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 or part
time
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 jobs while schooling. As every garden has weeds
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,
similarly
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,
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,
the
gap
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year
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also
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 has its downside. The student may not like to continue studying when he starts making a lot of money.
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,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 and touring at
this
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 stage may bring unnecessary exposure to certain things that might be of negative influences to the young
school
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 leaver.
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,
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,
one
year
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 is too long to stay out of
school
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.
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, so many
student
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students
 find it so hard to catch up with studies and homeworks after
this
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 period. In summary, students should
endavour
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 to use their
time
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 wisely during the
gap
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year
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 as it has a lot of advantages.

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