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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagre

widespread concern that our environmental problems are
worse
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getting worse
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 and worse in any part of the world
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 we must take action on them before everything
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 too late. Some people suppose that environmental protection is only feasible at a macro level
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, I disagree with
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 point of view. We cannot deny that the role of governments and
organizations
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organisations
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 in protecting our planet is extremely important
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 there are things that citizens are unable to do
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 governments can. An example of
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 the budget for programs to fight against climate change is so enormous that individuals cannot afford
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it.
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Besides
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, when it comes to managing enterprises to circumscribe the quantity of emissions from factories, it is the governments from various continents who discuss and produce accords
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 as the 1992 United
Nation
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 Framework Convention on Climate Change and
Paris
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the Paris
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 Agreement in 2015.
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,
that is
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 not to say that there is nothing that a person can do.
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 people are so aware of the impacts they have on the environment now. A single action like turning off the light when it is unnecessarily used may be of insignificance, but if we consider the bigger
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 when everybody in the world does the same, we will benefit greatly from it.
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, the public’s consuming
behaviors
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behaviours
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 may lead companies to produce more environmentally friendly products.
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, if people refuse to buy goods contained in plastic bags, stores and supermarkets will change to other types of
bag
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bags
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 that are more eco-friendly. In a nutshell, to save the green of our world, it is the duty of not only international institutions and nations but
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 everybody
in anywhere
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everywhere
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. What everyone should do is to do
one’s
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their
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 part well and spread it to others. By acting as soon as possible,
can we
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we can
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 secure the future for our next generations.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. You might want to add a thesis statement at the end of your introduction.
coherence
Try to use clearer paragraphing. Each main idea should be in a separate paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
task achievement
Good use of relevant examples to support your points.
coherence
Your conclusion nicely summarizes your main ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • international cooperation
  • international treaties and agreements
  • Paris Agreement
  • global regulatory bodies
  • standardize efforts
  • region-specific challenges
  • technological innovations
  • community-driven initiatives
  • cross-border collaboration
  • national governments
  • environmental policies
  • enforce measures
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