Some people think that high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that good working atmosphere is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In taking up a
job
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, there are several factors to be considered, some people believe a fat
salary
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or
mouth-watering income
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the mouth-watering income
is an important criteria,
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however other
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however, other
folks are of the opinion that the work
environment
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is of utmost importance. In
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essay I will be discussing both views and
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my opinion. One one hand, those who choose a competitive
salary
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over a good working
environment
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are not wrong. There is a saying that "money answers all",
this
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saying is true in our world today, take
for example
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; in
nigeria
a republic in West Africa on the Gulf of Guinea; gained independence from Britain in 1960; most populous African country
Nigeria
, before anyone can have a good life, the individual must be living on an income of over a hundred thousand
naira
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
more
per month. A good life which includes; capacity to care for loved ones and families and saving a little. Most people in
nigeria
a republic in West Africa on the Gulf of Guinea; gained independence from Britain in 1960; most populous African country
Nigeria
live in abject poverty
as a result
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of earning peanuts as
salary
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,
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therefore to
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therefore, to
live above an average citizen, the size of
salary
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is to be considered.
On the other hand
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, deciding to take a
job
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because of the working situations is not a crime rather it is an issue to be thought over. There are folks who
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carry out
take
home a fat
salary
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yet do not have
job
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satisfaction, due to the kind of
environment
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they work in.
For
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instance in
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instance, in
lagos
chief port and economic center of Nigeria; located in southwestern Nigeria on the Gulf of Guinea; former capital of Nigeria
Lagos
which is the centre of excellence,
majority
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the majority
of workers there are well paid,
nevertheless
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the hustle and bustle of
this
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state is killing. The rate at which
salary
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earners breakdown is alarming, whereas people who earn little in remote areas like
ibadan
a large Yoruba city in southwestern Nigeria; site of a university
Ibadan
, are able to enjoy the little they have,
thus
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the working atmosphere is a matter to be put in consideration when opting for a
job
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. In conclusion, in my own
opinion i
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opinion, I
opinion I
believe looking out for a big
salary
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and a conducive
environment
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, before taking a
job
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are important factors to be considered because, both are needed for
job
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satisfaction.
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