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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people are using
technology
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at
 a very high rate. They are geek to
use
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 new gadgets for their work and studies. They
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 believe that students have need to
use
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 computers, Internet in their education in
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 generation while others
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disagree
 with
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 statement. They things that
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it is
it's
 not necessary to
use
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 in schools. I would have discussed on both sides in the upcoming paragraphs. Clearly,
technology
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 and
Internet
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the Internet
has provided
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have provided
 ocean of knowledge to the learners. They can search any of the topic or subject with the one click of
mouse
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a mouse
.
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At
 present, it is becoming very easy to
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 Internet for studies
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 of writing all things
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in
 notebooks. Infect, it becomes worthy for the students and increases their exam performance. To exemplify, Wikipedia is a main source of education for students where they can study their particular subjects.
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, there are some people whose disagree with it that children would have
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use
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used
Internet
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the Internet
 or any other
technology
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 in schools. They think that if students have been using it while studies, it would be a cause of lack of communication with humans. As human interaction is
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 very important for
them but
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them, but
 it is even possible through
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the Internet
. People whose think that their children will lose communication with others, Skype and Facebook
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are
 the best examples to show them that these kind of innovations are completely using for face to face talks or for video calls.
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 the conclusion, even though
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access, use
use
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 of
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the Internet
 and Computers could be
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affected
affect
 in a negative way in
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education, hence
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,
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technology
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the technology
 is completely beneficial for students.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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