In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In Different Nations across the Globe, Individuals tend to purchase Clothes and make

Hair styles

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Hairstyles

in line with the Trend of Fashion World. In my Opinion, people chose

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Lifestyle to Avoid Being Perceived as Old Fashioned, which in many cases destroys their Self-Esteem.

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, the Constant change in Fashion has always placed individuals on their toes to keep up to date with trends. Which has been

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of peer pressure as well as a bid to fit into Social Gatherings.

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, A Friend of Mine recently sent me an invite to a

wedding which

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wedding, which

clearly stated the choice of cloth chosen according to

latest trend

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the latest trend

, failure to comply will lead to not

been

the state or fact of existing

being

allowed to attend the event. In

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case

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people would be left with no choice than to buy

the trendy

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the trendiest

outfit

otherwise

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you would be left out

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, Fashion industries and Stylist tend to take advantage of

individuals

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individual's

individual

readiness to stay In Vogue as a strategic opportunity to show their creativity and they start up a new trend knowing it would be embraced quickly especially if they are considered ICONS.

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, keeping up with the revolving Fashion has caused nothing but damage to people self esteem, due to the inability to afford the latest lifestyle.

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, unhealthy competition between individuals

arises allowing

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arises, allowing

those who cannot sustain

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life either go into fraudulent means or become depressed, as

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has become a concern in the society.

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in today’s world of social media

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there is a great chance to show off latest fashion items you acquired

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hair styles are not

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left out. To jump into the trend

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people do all in their power never minding if it is negative or the effect it has on others. In conclusion, I believe that many follow up with The Evolving Fashion in other to fit into social gatherings as well as wanting to be tagged an Icon in that aspect.

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, We can never neglect the constant damage effect it has on individuals and Society.

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In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Your opinion

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