Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is individuals responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It
Suggestion
It's
thought by some that it is the responsibility of those in in authority to reduce the intake of sugary
food
Use synonyms
by individuals, while others are of the view that individuals should be in control of their
sugar
Use synonyms
intake. In my opinion, I consider that the government should increase the taxes paid by sugary
food
Use synonyms
industry in order to curtail
this
Linking Words
behaviour.
This
Linking Words
essay would discuss both opinions, and provide a logical conclusion. On the one hand, some people think that the government should impose a higher tariff on sugary
food
Use synonyms
, and I agree with them. If
this
Linking Words
is done, the prices on sugary substances will be increased by the manufacturers, or sellers of these products,
thus
Linking Words
, making it expensive for individuals to purchase. Because of the expensive nature of
food
Use synonyms
containing
sugar
Use synonyms
, individuals will be forced to abstain from it,
therefore
Linking Words
, making them limit their
sugar
Use synonyms
consumption. As an illustration,
as a result
Linking Words
of the higher tariff paid by alcohol sellers in the UK,
this
Linking Words
lead to an increase in the price of alcohol, and there has been a drastic reduction in the consumption of alcohol by the individuals
resident
Suggestion
residing
in
UK
Suggestion
the UK
.
This
Linking Words
is according to the report released by Bloomberg in 2015.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, it is believed by some people that individuals are in the best position to control their
sugar
Use synonyms
intake.
This
Linking Words
is because they know their health status better, and can limit it when they are aware that their blood
sugar
Use synonyms
level has increased.
However
Linking Words
, I disagree with
this
Linking Words
view, as not all individuals actually go for checkup to ascertain their blood
sugar
Use synonyms
level, and
this
Linking Words
exposes them to health risk. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that those in authority are in the best place to help limit individual's
sugar
Use synonyms
consumption by imposing
higher tariff
Suggestion
higher tariffs
a higher tariff
on
food
Use synonyms
containing
sugar
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by courageugbogbo on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: