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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city center

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Owing to the growing number of
vehicular
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vehicle
movement
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movements
 in the big cities
,
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,
 these
increase
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increases
has caused
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have caused
 several difficulties that
has raised
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have raised
 a proposal by some state to ban private cars from the central cities. In my opinion, the banning of private cars should be implemented as there have been
increase
 of human fatigue caused by everyday traffic congestion we encounter on the
city
road
.
Firstly
, in the
city
 we have almost all the major businesses running
day
 to
day
 activities that has caused
congestion making
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congestion, making
 it difficult for everyone to access
,
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,
as a result
 of these, other
road
 users often encounter traffic caused majorly by private car users
hence
 fatigue has been their significant complaint. These
has caused
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have caused
 decrease in human output in their Jobs or various businesses.
For instance
,
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,
companies these days have gotten negative reviews due to their sluggish customer representatives which is totally not their
fault but
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fault, but
 due to the long time spent on the
road
 before getting to work.
On the other hand
, banning private cars will help
increase
 usage of other means of
transportation
 that will generate more revenue for the state and encourage the state to create more means of
transportation
 in the global cities. These will be highly recommended for the growth and orderliness of the
city
.
For example
, the Metro Station has been left redundant for a long time because of the
increase
 usage of private vehicles
,
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,
 making the train means of
transportation
 go unnoticed as one of the fastest means of getting to the cities which can
also
 significantly help in reducing the number of private cars we have on the
road
. In conclusion
,
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,
 the banning of private cars in global cities will help
increase
 human output in their various
place
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places
 of work and decreasing the number of negative reviews many companies have gotten as well as
increase
 the growth of using other means of
transportation
 that will help the efficiency of
day
 to
day
 activities in the
city
.
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