In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

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These days,

skin

lightening products

is becoming

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are becoming

increasingly profitable. More and more people opt for these products for various reasons. In

this

essay, I will discuss that while adverts and people's personal decisions are causes for

this

upsurge, there are

also

potential dangers of using

such

products. The main cause of the rapid increase in the market for

skin

whitening creams and soap is

Suggestion

an advertisement

. Some people are susceptible to the manipulations that adverts present, aiming to persuade them that buying these creams will make them look more presentable and live happier lives. These adverts are often aimed at young people, especially the female folks.

Furthermore

, people use bleaching products because to them, it is trending. Some ladies are pressured by their peers and some celebrities they see looking whitened on social media.

Thus

, They want to look attractive, acceptable and glamorous. The effect of

this

have been and will continue to be very serious.

Firstly

, there is a potential health risk involved when

this

products

Suggestion

product

are injected

Suggestion

is injected

into the

skin

, especially cancer of the

skin

For example

, a recent statistics carried out in the University of Benin Teaching Hospital, has it that over 80% of patients diagnosed with cancer was traced to habitual use of

skin

lightening creams and soaps. Not only

this

, the entire society will be given a false impression of

such

a fellow who has changed his or her complexion all of a sudden. People become posed with a negative perception about persons who bleach their

skin

. More so, the

skin

suffers from irritation, becomes worse if users are not able to cope with maintaining the high cost of purchasing them. In conclusion, as several as the reasons for the boom in the bleaching

skin

market

are

a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)

area

, so

also

such

people risk the danger of cancer and being portrayed in a bad light.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Skin lightening
Whitening products
Cultural standards
Beauty ideals
Media portrayal
Socioeconomic status
Colorism
Self-esteem
Toxic ingredients
Hydroquinone
Mercury
Melanin
Dermatological health
Consumer awareness
Regulatory bodies
Ethical marketing
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In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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