In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

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These days,
skin
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lightening products
is becoming
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are becoming
increasingly profitable. More and more people opt for these products for various reasons. In
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essay, I will discuss that while adverts and people's personal decisions are causes for
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upsurge, there are
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potential dangers of using
such
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products. The main cause of the rapid increase in the market for
skin
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whitening creams and soap is
advertisement
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an advertisement
. Some people are susceptible to the manipulations that adverts present, aiming to persuade them that buying these creams will make them look more presentable and live happier lives. These adverts are often aimed at young people, especially the female folks.
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, people use bleaching products because to them, it is trending. Some ladies are pressured by their peers and some celebrities they see looking whitened on social media.
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, They want to look attractive, acceptable and glamorous. The effect of
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have been and will continue to be very serious.
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, there is a potential health risk involved when
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products
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product
are injected
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is injected
into the
skin
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, especially cancer of the
skin
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.
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, a recent statistics carried out in the University of Benin Teaching Hospital, has it that over 80% of patients diagnosed with cancer was traced to habitual use of
skin
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lightening creams and soaps. Not only
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, the entire society will be given a false impression of
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a fellow who has changed his or her complexion all of a sudden. People become posed with a negative perception about persons who bleach their
skin
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. More so, the
skin
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suffers from irritation, becomes worse if users are not able to cope with maintaining the high cost of purchasing them. In conclusion, as several as the reasons for the boom in the bleaching
skin
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market
are
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
area
, so
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do
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people risk the danger of cancer and being portrayed in a bad light.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skin lightening
  • Whitening products
  • Cultural standards
  • Beauty ideals
  • Media portrayal
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Colorism
  • Self-esteem
  • Toxic ingredients
  • Hydroquinone
  • Mercury
  • Melanin
  • Dermatological health
  • Consumer awareness
  • Regulatory bodies
  • Ethical marketing
  • Natural remedies
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