Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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So popular are social networking sites
such
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as Facebook or Twitter, that almost every single individual in today's
society
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are utilizing
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is utilizing
them on
daily basis
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a daily basis
via computers or smart phones.
However
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, despite the potential risks they pose, they do expert
more benefit
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more beneficial
effects on individuals and
society
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as a whole Social networking sites seem to take heavy to toll on the health of people and on
well-being
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the well-being
of
society
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.
For instance
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, many minors and celebrities
in particular
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, are easily bullied or harassed by
threaatening
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
messages or photos spreading on these social media sites. One becoming a target of
cyberbullying
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, not only are those victims more likely to suffer
axiety
(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
, depression and even suicide, but
this
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also
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futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
father
does harm to their life
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
work.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, in can make us misconceive between meaningful relationships fostered and various relationships established through virtual world. So an undesirable consequence that
further
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detrimentally affects ways more people as well as communities and
thus
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significantly reduce social cohesion The exposure to these social media sites
on the other hand
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is
facilator
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facilitated
facilitator
in extending opportunities of learning
form
a giver or sender
from
various people regardless of geographical locations and cultural. Compared with traditional education that learners have to be confined to a classroom, learning through social networking sites empowers them to interact with each other on a large-scale, sharing information about their culture and work
colaboratively
accomplished by collaboration
collaboratively
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, SNS is
also
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a useful, indispensable tool for
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
learning thanks to its regular accessibility through which employees can improve their expertise in
flexible way
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a flexible way
flexible ways
. For government or international organizations take advantage of its fast-spreading nature to share public information, new rules or regulation
and prom
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ote civic engagement
such
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as public health and polictical activities In conclusion, detrimental as social networking sites appear to be, they do benefit the general public and the whole
society
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educationally and civically
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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