Young people in modern in modern world seem to have more power and influence that any previous young generation. why is this case? What impact does this have on the relationship of old and young people

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address, today's youth seem to
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cause
more power and influence because of
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the development
of technology, science and globalisation for so it
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relationships
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shed
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light on factors and its impact on bonds among
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power and successor can be considered the improvement of
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the educational system
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resources to support the students who want to study abroad coma studying abroad not only helps to improve their
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education
but improve throw Outlook as base in different cultures in the world.
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lead to be less informed and educated current current
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noted that great difference between young and old people cause some problems
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as not understanding
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each other
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coma some older people do not want to accept that you can get distance study or work and do shopping on the internet is
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wasting your time.
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the young all the
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generations
in in a not understanding the new technology. In conclusion, The main solution for
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problem can be afford to understand each other, because it will not be the right choice to make teenager avoid following the technology in the modern world.
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