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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their rights to vote. WHAT problems does this cause and what are some possible solutions?

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In many nations, youngsters are ignoring to cast a
vote
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 during the polls. The main problem
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 causes is less number of votes to a potential candidate and the most viable solution is to educate their young people about
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 issue. The principal problem associated with ignoring to
vote
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is
indicates an affirmative response
yes
, a significant candidate may lose to the opposition because of poor results in the election.
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 to say, many younger individuals are busy with studies and engaging in social activities neglecting the primary responsibility of voting.
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, a bad person can emerge as a leader by winning in the elections leading to national issues.
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, in 2010, Mr Clint who has got wide recognition among
people
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the people
 for his hospitality lost in the UK elections to a lesser known person due to fewer people participating in
polling
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the polling
. A long term solution to
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 predicament is to educate young people about the dangers of not voting. Children in schools could be taught about how to participate in the ballot and learn the importance of it to a country so that the
next
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 generation will act more responsibly. They are
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 likely to teach their parents about the things learned at school and adults will
also
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 be influenced by
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 initiative.
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, school children in Germany were taught about the consequences of not registering a
vote
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 and now they have better results in the public elections. In conclusion, the young generation is ignoring to
vote
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 because of syllabus at school and busy with social parties resulting in losing a prominent leader and teaching the children about the election system is the only answer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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