Some people say the professional workers such as, doctors, nurses and teachers, who make greater contribution to the society, should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree and disagree?.

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It is considered by many people that players and celebrities ought to be paid less than those people who perform a great service for their own countries,

such

as, doctors, care givers, school teachers.

However

, I completely disagree with

this

viewpoint.

This

essay will discuss that media persons and athletes

also

play a significant role in developing their respective countries, so they

also

should be paid like other government employees.

Firstly

, many players playing at international level bring in foreign currency to their own countries. To some extent, some countries concentrate on sports substantially as athletes bring more currency compared to other sectors. Their contribution is undeniable. Because they help to boost the economy of their countries, they should be treated fairly by their countries. In case of financial advantages, governments ought to pay them like other servants,

such

as, physicians, tutors and so on.

Secondly

, media personalities often work as a brand

embassador

a diplomat of the highest rank; accredited as representative from one country to another

ambassador

of their respective countries. There are many celebrities who are popular at international level.

Although

these people contribute to their countries minimally, they introduce their countries upsides to their global fans.

As a result

, their exotic fans hold a positive perception about their favourite actors' home country. What is more, tourism industry and

others

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

sectors get benefitted.

For example

, Shahrukh Khan is an India movie star who is very popular internationally. He has millions of global fans. Now most

connects a noun with the preceding word

his foreign fans know India because of him and their movie industry. Since he has taken his country at international level, the state should reward him the way other government employees, namely doctors, engineers, get rewarded by the state. To conclude, Both service holders and athletes or media personalities make

contribution

Suggestion

contributions

a contribution

to their countries equally, so governments should not be partial to any particular group while giving salaries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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