Some people say the professional workers such as, doctors, nurses and teachers, who make greater contribution to the society, should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree and disagree?.

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It is considered by many people that players and celebrities ought to be paid less than those people who perform a great service for their own countries,
such
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as, doctors, care givers, school teachers.
However
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, I completely disagree with
this
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viewpoint.
This
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essay will discuss that media persons and athletes
also
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play a significant role in developing their respective countries, so they
also
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should be paid like other government employees.
Firstly
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, many players playing at international level bring in foreign currency to their own countries. To some extent, some countries concentrate on sports substantially as athletes bring more currency compared to other sectors. Their contribution is undeniable. Because they help to boost the economy of their countries, they should be treated fairly by their countries. In case of financial advantages, governments ought to pay them like other servants,
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as, physicians, tutors and so on.
Secondly
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, media personalities often work as a brand
embassador
a diplomat of the highest rank; accredited as representative from one country to another
ambassador
of their respective countries. There are many celebrities who are popular at international level.
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these people contribute to their countries minimally, they introduce their countries upsides to their global fans.
As a result
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, their exotic fans hold a positive perception about their favourite actors' home country. What is more, tourism industry and
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
sectors get benefitted.
For example
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, Shahrukh Khan is an India movie star who is very popular internationally. He has millions of global fans. Now most
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of
his foreign fans know India because of him and their movie industry. Since he has taken his country at international level, the state should reward him the way other government employees, namely doctors, engineers, get rewarded by the state. To conclude, Both service holders and athletes or media personalities make
contribution
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contributions
a contribution
to their countries equally, so governments should not be partial to any particular group while giving salaries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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