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Today more peoples are travelling than ever before.Why is this the case?What are the benefits of travelling for teh travellers ?

#peoples #case #teh #travellers
In today's era
,
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,
peoples
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the peoples
 want to go
with
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to
 some place where they never went before and want to explore more places on
this
 earth. That's why travelling become some popular topic and become
passion
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the passion
 to everyone. In
this
 essay, I will explain why travelling is increased as compared to earlier and its benefits. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of reasons for
increase
 of
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
. Nowadays all peoples are busy with their daily routine.Due to
increase
 of work pressure, they are getting less
time
 to
spent
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spend
 with their families.So during
holidays
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the holidays
,
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,
 people are planning to go for a vacation and want to spend some
time
 with their family. Travelling with families and spending
time
 with near and dears will
increase
 the relationship and our mind
become
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becomes
is becoming
 stable and cool.
Secondly
, There are lots of places where peoples want to go and explore yourself in the surrounding where we are staying.
This
 may give us
more confident
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more confidence
 and knowing the places which will help us in near future.
Thirdly
, there are some peoples who
wants
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want
 to go remote places and want to discover the unknown facts available
in
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on
 earth.Though it was dangerous and not
recommended but
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recommended, but
 peoples are travelling to explore the unknown facts.
This
may leads
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may lead
 to discover the new things and wants to make him popular in the world.e.
g
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G
:
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:
- Now a days
peoples
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people
 are
planned
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planning
 to go Antarctica and wants to stay there in the strong winter. Though they knows that they are putting their life
risky but
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risky, but
 wants to know the unknown facts that are
happening the real world
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happening in the real world
 and want to inform
this
 to upcoming generations.Fourthly, Some peoples are like to travel different countries and want to enjoy the nature of the beauty. To recapitulate, We have plenty of reason for
increase
 of travelling compared to earlier. Though some extend, it was not
advised but
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advised, but
 it has
good advantage
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a good advantage
to
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for
of
 the upcoming generations. So we can plan for more travelling and spent more
time
 with families with planned vacation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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