some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

Some people believe that
government
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the government
should allocate more funds to other sector of the
economy
rather than wasting money on arts and culture.
This
essay will
first
discuss how significantly other sectors
such
as agriculture and
health
contribute
immersely
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
to the
economy
and
also
explain how
life
expectancy depends more on other sectors than arts and culture.
Firstly
, allocating revenue to
arts
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the arts
will only yield a little dividend to the economical growth when compared to other sectors
such
as
health
and agriculture. When more funds
are disburse
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are disbursed
to
this
other
sectors
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sector
of the
economy
the impact and benefits are significantly seen and can
also
be measured in the
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
of the citizens of the country and
also
in the
economy
at large.
This
means that, there will be
reduction
Suggestion
reduced
in famine (food will be readily available), people will be active to go about their normal
life
activities and many citizens will be able to access good
health
care services.
For instance
, the punch newspaper in the year 2012 recorded that mortality and morbidity rate in Nigeria reduced with about 20%
as a result
of more funds allocated to the
health
sector.
Secondly
,
life
expectancy depends more on other sectors than the arts in that when government
spend
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spends
more on
this
other sectors more
life
will be impacted than the arts because k lesser people have
interest
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an interest
in
arts
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the arts
, unlike other sectors like education
,
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, health, agriculture
, agriculture, health
health
agriculture and so on where many people show interest and will benefit from.
For
instance when
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instance, when
the country authorities focus more on education
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
many
life
's will be touched positively both the poor and the
rich
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rich, therefore
therefore
many
life
expectations will be met thereby securing the nation's future. In conclusion, government should spend more on other sectors that will bring more dividend to the
economy but
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economy, but
in doing
this
the arts sector should not be neglected.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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