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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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The Internet has made learning free and 
instantaneous
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instant
 to the populace through the use of
gadget
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the gadget
a gadget
gadgets
. Online learning is beneficial owing to the ease of learning and comfort it brings to
people but
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people, but
 there are
also
 some drawbacks to be taken into account Admittedly, Internet learning has made it
easy
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easier
 to acquire free knowledge within the speed of light.
This
 is because it offers in depth information on various topics within a fraction of seconds.
This
 method of learning
also
 makes it easier for students to learn on the go because they can access their course materials on a smartphone or tablet.
In
addition it
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addition, it
 provides students with
better opportunity
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better opportunities
a better opportunity
at
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in
 improving academically without quitting their job.
For example
, Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria offers  an online MBA program
On the other hand
, a major issue associated with online learning is little or no face to face interaction with the tutor and classmates.
This
 has often times made learning difficult for some people.
Additionally
, it gives room for plagiarism, because there is no supervision, students can copy their assignment. Another demerit is that people's intellectual work is not protected on the Internet and can be copied without their permission. In
conclusion while
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conclusion, while
 online learning is beneficial in so many ways, plagiarism and theft of intellectual material are the demerits associated with it.  
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