Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is observed that, deaths of teenagers arising from road traffic accidents

Suggestion

are

on the increase, to solve

this

menace, some people are of the opinion that folks other the age of 24 should not be allowed to drive a vehicle.

This

essay completely agrees with

this

point of view because the under 24's are not wholly matured to operate a car and

also

, they do not yet have a

sense

of responsibility.

First

and foremost, one of the reasons why I subscribe to

this

point of view is because,

majority

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the majority

of those under the age of 24 are not yet matured in all ramifications and allowing them to drive is like giving them a death sentence.

For example

, driving takes courage and maturity, if these kids are faced my an incoming vehicle that just had a failed braked, would they not

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

lose

hope? Would they not chicken

out

Accept comma addition

out, thus

thus

loosing focus and allowing an accident to

occour

come to pass

occur

. Due to lack of courage and maturity, I think anyone In the early twenties should not be permitted to drive.

Secondly

, another reason is that, most young adults do not have a

sense

of responsibility, they just want to be gallivanting and cruising cars up and down, they are not so concerned nor accustomed with the rules and regulations of

owing

have ownership or possession of

owning

and driving a vehicle.

In other words

, they are only concerned with enjoying life, not with the rules and regulations guiding driving as a whole.

For instance

, an artiste of the same age, in Nigeria got himself killed, as he was drunk due to lack of

sense

of responsibility and ran into a truck that was standing by itself. To avoid loosing the young adults

unduely

to an undue degree

unduly

, it is better if they are denied the right of driving a motor. In conclusion,

although

it may look like denying the young adults their rights, but because of their immaturity and no

sense

of accountability, they should be stopped from driving.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

327 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

road safety
traffic fatalities
risk perception
graduated licensing
enforceable legislation
statistical correlation
demographic analysis
adolescent development
age discrimination
public transportation
driving prohibition
legal restrictions
vehicular accidents
rash driving
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Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?