Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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is changing every day.

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of spending our free time has changed drastically in recent years. Shopping takes the priority of young

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adults'

leisure bucket list. Some folks insist that,

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positive way

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a positive way

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while others insist that it has a negative

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, some people say that, shopping has a positive

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to the

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. The lives of people have greatly affected and changed after

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the invention

of social media platforms and the internet. Because people see what others do and what are the latest trends through those

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, people are lined up near the Apple mobile stores whenever a new flagship arrived to the market. Because people are very keen to update their tech devices. Another

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is that, after a famous movie is released, people try to imitate those actors by wearing those costumes. Due these reasons, shopping has become the number one leisure activity among young adults.

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, some folks elaborate that

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is a negative trend. Because these people insist that the energy of these young adults are wasting for nothing. They hold the notion that the energy should spend toward the positive outcome of the

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, organize a protest for environmental

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by the factories.

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, the young adults are spending their hard-earned money for these tech gadgets and cloths which is a waste of money. Because whenever a new set of gadgets are found they are going to dump the previously owned

gadeget

a device or control that is very useful for a particular job

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which to the same job and buy a new one. Because of all these reasons, some people say shopping is a negative development. In my opinion, It is good to update about the latest trends.

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, by shopping if you can find something good that makes your life easier and simpler,

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you should buy that

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believe that as long as if you are a self disciplined person,

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development does not

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you in

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a bad manner

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. In conclusion, every development has both negative and positive

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to our lives and to the

society

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. It is our duty to apply these changes to our lives in a positive way.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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leisure activity
consumer culture
material possession
social experience
disposable income
tech-savvy
convenience
fashion trends
overconsumption
economic stimulation
retail industry
materialism
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consumer spending
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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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school children are becoming far too dependent on computers. this is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. teacher need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all cost and go back to teaching basic study skills. do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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