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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Both men and women have started
equally
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equating
 working in every nation, and
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 it is natural that they should divide their
household
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 chores among themselves. I agree with
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 viewpoint as
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 way of
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 provides several advantages
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 as a stress-free
life
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 and courage to be independent.
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 with, sharing home chores mainly reduces the
work
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 pressure of the couple. Sharing domestic chores
reduces
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reduce
 the pressure on couples. If one of them has to do all the
work
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 alone after office hours, they will be under tremendous pressure. Eventually, the person who does all the domestic
work
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 will have no option but quit their job.
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 will make them miss out on their career and create feelings of resentment.
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, sharing
household
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work
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 enables both spouses
to have
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have
 a flourishing career and stress free family
life
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. Sharing
household
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 chores
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also enables
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also enable
 both men and women to be independent.
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 is because both of them learn to do each and every job at home, and can run the house independently when one of them is out of town.
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, many software professionals benefit from
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 phenomenon because their job requires them to travel abroad frequently leaving their family. In conclusion, working couples should share their
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 chores because it will help them reduce the workload and in turn, the stress.
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, it enables them to be independent when they are all alone. Every working couple should be encouraged to adopt
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 lifestyle for leading a relaxed
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.
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